"hey - you might 'speak from the heart' , but unfortunate it doesn't go anywhere near your head. Learn some basic grammar and how to use it for effect and you'll do a lot better.
For instance, in your sentence "I should not have worried both the Little Bushmen and the APO exceeded all of my expectations" ...it implies that you were somehow worrying the Little Bushmen (maybe they'd read another of your reviews?), but that the APO exceeded your expectations.
Placing a comma / semi or colon / dash, after the word 'worried' would actually give the sentence meaning. Pretty obvious its just your friends giving these comments. Read the Miss Olivia review for some lessons in using language for meaning and effect."
"SO well written...succinct yet conveying more than enough to make you want to see the play.
The intelligent use of language to convey meaning is a dying art, but with people like Miss Olivia producing work of this quality, there is still hope it may survive.
Miss Olivia's talent is all the more remarkable when you consider the serious handicap that growing up with her mother has imposed on her."
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